lordy. crazy ass day.
lauren's birthday, got osme crappy grades back, need to catch up on history, cannot write to save my ass.

will be at globe 3-8:30 tomorrow doing hw with angel and laur and julie and the working. going to see either wimbledon or garden state, then pulling a girls nite sleepover thing and getting angel hazed friday morning.

new screename: linernoteluv (use it!)

blargh. homework, and parents' divorce, and writer's block-- oh my!

It simply was and there was no explaining it. He had tried before on several occasions to make this clear to her, but she simply couldn’t seem to grasp it. Still, he felt it his duty to try.


“Why is the sky blue?� he asked her.


“Because of the thickness and degree of curvature of the atmosphere and the refraction of the light hitting it,� she replied archly.

oh god, ohgodohgodohgod- i think i'm maturing or something.

oh my god. yes, yes- YES!
no, that was not an orgasm, nor an herbal essences commercial- that was me, Alison, and the feeling of validation!
oh yes.
i swear to fucking god, if i can get just one of these moments thrown into the mix once every, say, year or so, i'll be set. ::le sigh::
i don't want to be one of those people who blames all their fucked-up-edness on their parents, but i'm really sstarting to think that the reason i'm so hyper-sensitive and emotional and conscious of myself is because of my dad, and how my mom and i have always lived on our toes- never knowing when something small we did would make him blow and i'd spend the nite crying in my room, feeling like shit. wow. i am SO ready for this counselor. jesus.
mr. malcolm- fuck you. fuckyoufuckyoufuckyou. i KNOW i may not have the credibility of our society that kristin has but motherfuck THAT!
she's great, she's really is- and i know that she's got a ton of talent. but, i mean, why can't someone else get a chance? i'm not worse, just different. god, i hope it's only that i'm different.
if i suck at this than everything's down the drain.

letter from ms. coriale to me.
oh god-- i will TAKE IT!



I took a look at "my visible heart" and here are some of my thoughts:
 
First, you did a good job at splitting the poem into parts, although your title really prepares us for the conclusion, meaning a visible, exposed heart, sure of the truth of a feeling that came from her insides.
 
Then, your introduction prepares the reader for the lack of security or optimism that the writer is feeling, "highway warnings, a lamp post waiting to fall, seemingly done, or had they not yet begun.."  There is a heightened intensity from the beginning and I wonder if this is a surrealistic view of a vision that creates futuristic ties: "pretty and captivating and seemingly done or had they not yet begun." This then creates a time change that leaves the reader unconvinced of your experience, yet you come back strong in the end.
 
Then, I wonder about the role of society that perhaps interrupts, yet in this case the vision of infantile innocence escapes the frame of the "transparent glass." 
 
The ending is my favorite where you are the "cosmonaut, warrior, girl" (separated creatively since warrior girl would drown out the effect of your womanhood..The poet is a warrior, a woman and her strength and faithfulness to this love is like a roller coaster of disbelief, release and realism..But, in the end, she reveals her loyalty and perhaps her visible heart..to love "with your insides" is to love internally, despite all of the outside pressure, the "highway warnings, lamp posts waiting to fall and the red that warns us to turn back and flee from what we have learned to be ominous..
 
Alison, you are a talented young poet and when I read your work, I ask myself about your experience, your impetus to write..how is it that you have gained this vision at such a young age..I have heart a lot of poets, academics and others who are trying to get exposed and they do not approach your force..You are also using division well as well as other poetic devices..I tried to look at your poem, draw some conclusions and give you some feedback..I hope this helps and again, thanks for sharing this with me..I really enjoyed it. 

I know this is lame, but I think 'Iris' is really underrated and gets a lot of trashin just cause it was in City of Angels (one of my all-time guilty pleasures, to be sure.).
blargh.

Dear Ex-Boyfriend,
You suck. And by suck, I mean a lot. Like a lot a lot. Like, how much weight that Jared guy lost from eating Subway kind of a lot.
Best Wishes,
Alison.

Dear Friends,
Stop getting boyfriends, I'm jealous.
ROAR,
Alison.


Sorry, I'm feeling very Alanis Morrisette tonite.

translucent orange vials bright like highway warnings. wreck ahead, between big curves and a lamp post waiting to fall, and
i was there! and knowing, determined to see through and catch the red skies in mourning, pretty and captivating and seemingly done.
or had they not yet begun?

not yet begun to see, a small infant freshly plucked and messy. blind, without the aid of transparent glass
everywhere, slid within holey frames,
some upon which we traced in love when the heater made canvases in the nite,
and others that you took off and placed on the table in preparation even after the loving was long gone. (i am trusting that it had begun.)

opaque masses, no question as to their intentions, running into dead ends in the dark
of my convex frame quelling yr concave, only to have it begin heaving again, leaving.

a coup de grace to winter car rides

i will not regret blind faith at 3 am,
playing a cosmonaut, warrior, girl,
massive and unshrinking no matter the signs.

i will not regret this thing,
this that i share with yr mother-
i have loved you with my insides.

there were hearts!spray-painted onto the downspiral
of the pedestrian bridge, that was adjacent to all
that was green and brown.
and there was you; me, blue in jeans and tight
zip-up hoodie against you(r) blushing, against the cool
railing, against
a serene city backdrop that is only unfurled in the mid-afternoon of a chilly june day, when the lucky kids are still
in school and adults are being predicatable, making it easy,
getting divorced,
and we're all burning a bit-         giving off light.

there are cryptic messages
on stickers
on the gray
that paves the way,
and you; i, i smile in appreciation. i kick
the discarded pedal to the next level
of the spiral, i forget
to count the peddlers, i hate
people who are at liberty to hold hands.

it's gone cold now, and there are speed-limit signs.
there are on yr own days and,
i'll be home early to bond with you
days, and they're all the same-
precursors to the two separate beds, in two separate rooms,
and you; me, who doesn't want to be caught crying, speaking up
in foreign tongues that would reveal where i've been since the bleeding started and the rainbows stained
coffee-spoon dips, and i took (in) plunges deep down
sewer manholds, manholes, collisions breaking the
ground- an inverse eruption in slow motion.
right now i'm breathing in the city, breathing in so many different places
confined by so many phi-based relations...

i am keeping busy. baking on the ground, sweating, driving, creating, scanning
the horizon,
searching with baited breath for a sign on the bumpers of
non-descript vessels, being hit in the solar plexus
till i rush back to the stairs and

lips pucker and pop!against the sides of arms whose
grasping hands lead their puppeteer up and down staircases in hot pursuit
of boys that never beckoned to me.

right now i'm breathing in the city, breathing in so many different places,
confined by so many phi-based relations...
save for the consistent erraticism of
my own inner climate.

lights go up,
realclose and unblushing
neath splayed strands and lush pinkiness.
yielding tones
and raspy endings, a paint-chipped radiator to warm yr heart this evening?
slow-moving reflections in TV screens and sliding glass shower doors,
    trace the truth in steam:
         ‘in my mind, everything we did was right’.
dripping wet,
step up and out so the cars rushing past can air-dry you as they honk, and then
leap for the reaching gasp they carry,
tunneled between the root-beer el camino and the galloping town and country, and ride it
until you’re dropped back where you started when the iron bars wouldn’t let you digress and the turn stiles kept you moving.
the windows are all pulled down shut now,
but you remember.
twenty-five cent popcicles and cinnamon lip smackers at lunch time still lay rotting against the roof of your mouth, even at
sweet sixteen, when you’ve done more than one might at ten and eight, or even twenty and one. but
yr hair’s still wet, and when the night wind sighs cold streaks rush across the back of yr neck and down yr chest between yr thighs. so
change gets you going back, yr hands clasping two subway poles. you swingswing back
and forth like yr drunk or high or in love and you lose yr footing as the creaking halt begins to come but then again, don’t you always?
both of you did, that nite at least.

thumping temples kept the beat ‘tween yr ears as
she made her nervous peace with rotating wrists and slinky, drunken fingers
romancing space while her hips upped the pace
and she sunk on down past guilt and deep-lying dis.honesties and so aimed only for the making of happy memories.
like, cactus flowers at sundown in the city.
    it’s too cold to wander around outside, so come on in to beds that slide and gravy bulbs that leave shadows in the corners of yr head and be sure to do yr best not to remember aching little snapshots of a former girl love sucking on rock candy past christmas-tide and humming lullabies to curls caught behind transparent scotch tape.
    try to forget little prince boy, yr art class crush, who liked taking that blonde one into the woods. remember when you went?
they all yelled and you even punched one back off a log, went into the creek to save the tall, lanky one, and was pushed back when she was being dragged off on the ground,
heavy and sick. and you slung her over yr shoulder
and prayed for sobriety
and the blonde one tossed her hair
and... and... “hey, hey, hey-- what’s my name sweetheart? d’you know who i am? wh-what’s my name bebe? stay awake! please, please just stay awake, and, and tell me- what’s my name sweetheart? oh god, stay awake...�
and you laid with her in yr legs out on a dirt road,
tapping         her cold cheeks
until the lights came and stuck her with tubes and said her name and pronounced you dead.

starting a forest fire in winter, yr art class crush had came back monday morning with only gleaming whites and smoke stuck in his clothes,
and you had inhaled deeply over acrylics and smearing lead
and knew you were finished there.

but you got clean, and it was too cold,
so you came in and forgot everything, didn’t you?

stumbling back across kilometers of floorboards, nails coming up and
out and ripping holes in socks only to evoke an unwanted response- giggling,
as he kept her secret and considered telling her one of his own. but her bra landing on the carpet that had faded to the color of her skin told him that she already knew, or could at least guess at it.
so he sprang out
through the window she’d opened with a cheeky grin,
flying the shutter open as she shuddered,
and so let the cold black eye in on their conspiracy.

...

now all their gorgeously-laid plans had been executed and laid to rest
deep in the pit of her
d
owny gut as
she clung to his side, wondering
if her eyes had run down her cheeks, picasso-esque, as
he squinted up at the yellow fan light like
an even younger lover, spread against the great green earth.
you rose and spun round with yr chubby arms out wide, letting the air taste the sticky,

cinnamon
-popsicle juice that laced yr mug and fingers.
sinking back down over me like a cold sweat,
i took you in deeper than e’er before,
till the paint-chipped radiator burst into flames and we traced the truth onto the
gleaming black retina.

clutching to anchored hips,
heavy as a single brick and twice as hard.

pressed deep into and swallowed by sand.
overwhelming fullness,
sinking down too fast,

i took you in
    and didn’t anticipate
the chill detachment

of angular numerals even then-- they that lost their spilled affection to the artificial bulb, forcing the planctan to grow shadows ‘till a dull beam shown from below like
collected drops burnt flat on a stove.

and the collapse came so soon
as we were pulled free and separate from simple sin(cerity) and, and--
and, turning away, i thought you wouldn’t come back. i thought you wouldn’t come back, but you did, adding insult to injury-

i’m too tired to do anything else too--
that wasn’t what i was wanting,
that was NOT what i was waiting for. these groans, shaking fists, naked truths…
this was not what i wanted for my piece of the pie.

and now it seems the braille on yr back has gone as sharp as yr words. i’ve pressed my fingers to the spindle, bled, and am hoping to sleep walled in by thorny arms until true luv’s kiss should deem to wake me up
and the people are (a)roused and cry,
“lord it must be exhausting to be you,
with all the overcomplicating you young lovers do!�

we’re so simple! you and i.
so go on and take a walk, get some air. listen to a song that makes you smile
(and please think of me)...
from rational realizations that emerged long before a solitary pink line did,

i know that—yeah-
no way.
not when you can't fess up and can't kiss
in front of an eye or two. and if, in these coming months,
you decide you can- then i'll cede to say
that i—yeah-
don’t go tiring yrself out with worrying until something goes wrong.

//this waterfall will outrun our scars,
    and i will be there, naked before you,     rainbows sprouting from my lashes,
and smiling.

a martyr swinging 'round, a sacrifice nailed down-
yr tears could mark my baptism.
so come on to me now,
and know that i haven't got anything new or exciting to put out into the world... no
mary janes to buckle up quick and on the go, no
shining jubilation radiating from virginal innocence, nor any
soft pink sweetness for the boy next door to love.

only the absolute,
        dire need to please and appease,
and a self-centeredness that could pass for creativity if the timing's right and yr in the mood.

but you weren't then-
so i fled, as red as her skirt,
running for (the) cover(s).
and i hope it's on it's way, cause the jazz is still between my ears and lungs and thighs and is showing no signs of emerging from some subterranean sweet spot where it seems only music and love can last.
my hair's been growing long and the wait even longer-
but the jazz is still with me. still moving and moving in me and out and in and moving me. always moving me to tears or past midnites or to painfully aching recollections of those beyond sacrosanct trips to the backseats of cars and to comforters and mars, high on the lust of teenage rendezvous' that have left me squirming inside my warm shell on nites like this when i claw parallel lines in the earth, forced to simulate the care i took in clawing yr back when she came and we left for our own lunar landing.
    afterwards and before we both took a glazed look around and realized
how tired and up and on we were-
and oh god,     there go my knees a-bucklin' again.

and well,
i've let it all resurface and have reaffirmed my devotion to the sky and the ground and how sexy i feel when i can't tell the two apart.
when i can do no wrong, when my makeup doesn't run, when my hair looks gorgeous, when we were tucked up inside each other like some fetal position defense device, or rolling around haphazardly on the A.M. kitchen tiles.
it's a reflex, i believe. (kissing you, that is.)
cause i'm so… young, and unrestrained, and alltogether notwhatyoushouldbewanting.
and, after a slip up in the way of a tongue slip, i curse myself for not being
coy and shy and for not
radiating with virginal innocence.
    but here you are again, and i've never let out a more pregnant sigh.
in faith, i am at my best with you pressed tight to me-
sober and drunk both at once. so,
with the kind of faith that which fuels fatalists,
i'll let myself lay back down on whatever isn't above
and keep silent when nervous or threatened by onslaughts of insecurity or sanity or honesty.

i'll keep things simple,
like these numbers and points and changes in temperature. like a take off in yr gut or the plane of yr chest when i run my hands over you and pull you tight to me-
we’re so simple.
we kiss, and i'll take my smiling leave.
    i'll be willing to work, accepting that this vinyl could strike me deep, that this kiss could be my dismissal- that i have every right to be afraid of sleeping alone and need not fall into insecurity as if it were anything less than a mound of comforters or yr loving.
and that, is what makes me a real female cosmonaut.